08-21-2020, 04:34 AM
Awesome. You make a cool & fun screen character
Ok so I'll give some honest feedback but MIND U im old af
by spame standards and been making music since the 90s, so this aint to put u down but glow u up feel me
lyrical content is kinda hohum. a few good lines and hooks, but if the words were viewed as a story, i woulda fell asleep on page 2. However, the "get off my lawn, ya damn dirty hippie!" was good, definitely cracked a smile there
also, the arrangement is soooooo thirsty for a bridge and/or chorus. Parched. Its the same lick over and over, even if it was played backwards for just a few bars would spice it up tremendously. It's a cool riff, dont get me wrong... just gets a bit stale after the first 16 or so in a row.
Other than that, disregard my petty criticism and keep making music my dude!! There is honest potential for greatness here, music is dying for fresh fun stuff like this
Ok so I'll give some honest feedback but MIND U im old af
by spame standards and been making music since the 90s, so this aint to put u down but glow u up feel me
lyrical content is kinda hohum. a few good lines and hooks, but if the words were viewed as a story, i woulda fell asleep on page 2. However, the "get off my lawn, ya damn dirty hippie!" was good, definitely cracked a smile there
also, the arrangement is soooooo thirsty for a bridge and/or chorus. Parched. Its the same lick over and over, even if it was played backwards for just a few bars would spice it up tremendously. It's a cool riff, dont get me wrong... just gets a bit stale after the first 16 or so in a row.
Other than that, disregard my petty criticism and keep making music my dude!! There is honest potential for greatness here, music is dying for fresh fun stuff like this